I collected so many words
as though they were flowers
chosen to adorn the altar ,
I tried making a garland ,
a lovely garland of them all ,
only to see one by one
slip through my fingers ,
except these glittering stars
which say -
loftily ,
majestically ,
lovingly ,
" I believe in you . "
Akash
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Dear brother Akash ...so very beautifully written ..your words work as catalyst invoking thoughts and more words ... i took the liberty to rewrite your composition with a different ending ... hopefully still with same emotions that you wanted to convey ...
I collected so many words
as though they were flowers
chosen to adorn the altar ,
I tried making a garland ,
a lovely garland of them all ,
only to see one by one
slip through my fingers ,
what remained was a
mesmerising fragrance
enveloping my soul
for an eternity...
whispering lovingly ,
" I believe in you . "
Dear dipti ,
Your ending has added beauty to the belief . Emotions are still the same . May be more fragrant .....
Each of my posts has been enriched by your comments .
Thank you ,
akash
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